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Posted on 12-18-07 09:55:45 PM (last edited by Tanks at 12-18-07 07:07 PM)

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Roundabout Law

In the small, spacious lobby of a court room stood a young man. He was nicely dressed with a suit and tie and seemed to be in his mid-twenties. He wore a plain gold badge on the front of his dark blue jacket. This badge ensured others that this man was an official defense attorney.

Next to him stood another man. This one seemed much older, and possibly in his late-thirties. H e was taller and also nicely dressed. He held in his hands a business card which read “Anthony Destra, Attorney at Law.”

“Are you sure I’m the man you want to do this?” asked a seemingly confused Tony, “You do realize that your life is in the hands of a mere rookie.” The man looked at Tony with a simple, but serious glare. “Do you not trust my decisions?” asked the man in a rebuking manner, “Do you really think I would put my life in the hands of someone if I didn’t trust their abilities? I did this for you. I knew if I didn‘t get you out of the foolish secretarial duty you have back at the firm, you‘d never experience the true thrill of being a defense attorney!”

Tony stood silently as he wondered whether the true thrill of being a defense attorney included feeling sick to ones stomach. In a last ditch effort, Tony fought back one more time. “You’re a legendary lawyer! Robert Stark! People have the utmost respect for you! I still don’t see why I have to do this! Can’t you defend yourself!” Robert glared at Tony again and said, “That respect that you speak of is smeared when your framed for a crime you didn’t commit. I trust you can handle this. Don‘t worry, I‘ll be next to you to guide you through this.”

After Robert finished speaking the bailiff entered the room to inform the arguing men that court was about to convene. Tony dawned the face of a distressed man. He was going to defend his friend, the veteran lawyer who taught him everything, whether he liked it or not. With this sudden acceptance of his fate, Tony followed Mr. Stark and the Bailiff into the court room.

The court room was filled with spectators eager to watch the fate of the defendant. Seeing all the people did not help Tony’s current state at all. He limped over on the left side of the room to what he though was his desk where he rejoined Robert. In the center of the room sat the Judge in a high pedestal. He was a very generic looking Judge with a bald head and a wavy, gray beard. On the right side of the court room stood a tall, blonde man deep in thought. He seemed to be about the same age as Tony. “That’s Joseph Tortone. He’s the best prosecutor in the country. He’s won much praise for his work though many suspect him of submitting forged evidence and other underhanded tricks.” Tony did not hear everything passed the word best. “He’s the best!” shuddered Tony under his breath, “What have I gotten myself into!”

The Judge picked up his gavel and slammed it on his pedestal. All went silent except for the chattering of Tony’s teeth. Ignoring the abnormally loud indication of fear coming from the Defense, the Judge began to speak. “Court is now in session for the trial of Robert Stark! Is the Prosecution ready?” Mr. Tortone lifted his head, bringing himself out of the deep thought he was in before. “The Prosecution is ready your Honor.”

The Judge then turned to Tony, looking him directly in the eyes. “Is the Defense ready?” Tony, though seemingly impossible, added yet another ailment to himself by turning white as a sheet but did not reply to the Judge. “Well Mr. Destra, are you ready?” the Judge asked again. Tony’s expression changed immediately and with a big smile and puppy dog eyes he replied with a simple but confused “Yes?”

The Judge, pleased with the explanation he was given on the state of the defense continued. “Let us begin. I’d like to remind you men that this is a murder trial. I want nothing but the truth as the outcome. With that said, the prosecution may make its opening statement.”

Will Tony be able to defend his best friend, teacher, and veteran attorney Robert Stark or will the renowned Joseph Tortone get the better of him? You’ll have to find out next time because the author has stayed up past his bed time and will be evicted from his house if he does not go to bed.

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I bet you could have guessed that this is based off of Phoenix Wright. My plan is to make it follow the first trial as strictly as possible.

Yea, I thought it was longer then I went to look at it and it turned out to be 1 1/4 pages typed. I can't believe I nuked the original draft down to this.

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Posted on 12-18-07 11:31:48 PM (last edited by teconmoon at 01-07-08 08:46 PM)

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Teconmoon suppresses a laugh....

Nah just kidding; it was pretty good.

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Posted on 01-02-08 10:15:46 PM

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So uh, are we ever going to get a continuation or did you decide not to do this anymore?

Also, now that we have a writing forum...

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Posted on 01-03-08 05:59:06 PM

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That was pretty good

Hopefully more will come

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Posted on 01-07-08 09:44:42 PM

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Roundabout Law Part II

We left off with Anthony “Tony” Destra, newbie attorney, about to receive the opening statement from his opponent and world renowned ace prosecutor, Joseph Tortone. Tony’s friend, Robert Stark, will be in deep trouble if Tony can’t pull through this trial.

The Judge slammed his gavel on the table. “Mr. Tortone! You may make your opening statement.” Tortone cleared his throat and began. “Thank you, your Honor. As you all know, the defendant, Mr. Stark, has been accused for the murder of his ex-girlfriend, Stacy Cadenza. She was struck on the head by a blunt object which was discovered lying next to her.” The Judge interrupted, “What was this blunt object?” “I have it right here your Honor.” Tortone submitted a small statue of Paul Revere. “Ahhh… I see…” said the Judge, “I even notice the blood stains on the base of the statue.” “You have a keen eye your Honor” said Tortone, “And I would also like to point out that tests were done on the stains to prove that it really is Miss Cadenza’s blood.”

The Judge again pounded his gavel, “Very good Mr. Tortone. You may now call your first witness.” “Thank you.” replied Tortone, “The prosecution calls the defendant Robert Stark to the stand.” Mr. Stark left his place with Tony and headed over the stand.
“You better not confuse me up there Mr. Stark” gulped Tony. “Don’t worry,” Mr. Stark said calmly, “It’s only the going to be the truth.”

Tortone began his questioning. “Mr. Stark… Is it true that your break up with Miss Cadenza was fairly recent?” “Yes it was.” replied Mr. Stark. “It appears to us that you two had not spoken in a while. She had just arrived home from overseas the day before she was murdered. Miss Cadenza had been spending time in Europe -- Paris, France, to be exact -- with certain other men. Did you know of these men before the murder took place?” “No I did not Sir, nor did I know that she was overseas after our break up” replied Mr. Stark. “At this time I would like to submit Miss Cadenza’s passport as evidence to the court” stated Tortone. “The court accepts to evidence” said the Judge, glancing at the contents being handed to him.

Tortone continued his questioning, “Next question Mr. Stark. You visited the victim’s condo on the day of the murder correct?” “Yes I did, but she was not home at the time. I didn’t see her that day.” “Objection!!!!” yelled Tortone, “The defendant is clearly lying.” “Clearly… Lying…?,” asked the Judge in a puzzled manner, “Mr. Tortone, there doesn’t seem to be enough evidence to make that claim just yet.” “I realize that your Honor, but I have a witness who can prove that Mr. Stark here really is lying” replied Tortone in a prideful fashion. “Please call this witness Mr. Tortone” exclaimed the Judge “Mr. Stark you may now step down and join your attorney… WHO SEEMS TO THINK IT’S NAP TIME!!!”

Everyone in the room turned their eyes from the Judge to Tony, who was sprawled over the desk in some contorted position no man would ever call comfortable. He was obviously asleep for when the room went silent while everyone stared, you could hear his monstrously loud snore. “TONY! Tony wake up!” Yelled Mr. Stark as he ran back to companion’s position. “Wha… AGH! I’M UP!” Screamed Tony, “Oh… How did the trial go? Did we win?” “No Tony… We’ve only started…” said Mr. Stark with a sigh, “I just got off the stand. Did you even hear a word I said?” Tony looked confused for a second, but then answered, “Something about your ex-girlfriend dieing and you’re being blamed for it. Right?” “Yes Tony…” replied Mr. Stark with an even deeper sigh, “I’m beginning to regret this…” Mr. Stark looked at Tony with a deep stare, “He’s about to call a witness. Are you sure you heard everything?” Tony’s brain worked for a few seconds until he finally answered, “Yep. Passport. Statue. France. Etc. I heard it all. I just dozed off when Tortone began ranting about you being a liar.” Unable to find the right words to say something along the lines of “Tony you’re an idiot,” Mr. Stark just sat back down next to him.

A few moments later a small man appeared at the stand. Mr. Tortone began, “This is Mr. Maurice Kaput. He is a vacuum salesman who happened to find the body of Miss Cadenza. He also witnessed the defendant running from the scene of the crime.”

Does Tony really remember what went on during Mr. Starks turn on the stand or will Tortone get the better of him with this new witness? You’ll have to wait until next time since the author has to make a movie in less than an hour or risk getting beheaded by his grammar teacher.
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I honestly thin I did this poorly... I was really stressed out when I wrote it. (See last paragraph for details) I could re-write it... but I'm lazy. Hey, it goes along with the PW series perfectly. Referring to the slightly worse reviews PW2 got compared to 1 and 3.

(no, I don't think this will end at 3... don't worry about that...)

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Posted on 01-07-08 09:48:42 PM

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I didn't think it was any worse than the first one. Not better, just the same

Still great.

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