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Dan Hibiki
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Talks mostly in pictures.

"I dislike the art of fighting, but I want to be the king of fighters!"
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Posted on 08-19-07 05:13:44 AM; last edit by Clockworkz on 08-19-07 05:55 AM Link | Quote
As some of you might know, I have several characters for my eventual webcomic/graphic novel, Trinity Zero. Namely Kevin, Jack, and Francine.

I went ahead and totally recreated them, since they were too boring initially.

Kevin:
Old design
and...
New design

Francine:
Old design
and...
New design

I'd really like some feedback here so I can know what to change, add, delete before I really make this the final design stuff. Thanks.

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Tarale
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Posted on 08-21-07 06:19:56 AM; last edit by Tarale on 08-21-07 11:54 AM Link | Quote
Lots of anatomy things, I think -- however, it's hard to tell due to the sketchiness of your work. I would like to see you clean up the linework, or at least define it better.

I would be interested in seeing how you actually work, because I suspect you do not block out the work first using three dimensional shapes -- parts of the linework indicate the character is "flat" e.g. Francine's hips, arms, etc in particular. Try to make it clearer that she is a three dimensional character, modeling it first in three dimensional shapes will make it easier for you to determine which way folds in clothing and such would work.

EDIT: fuck it, this is what I mean

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